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Racters I wanted to see from the side characters to get a better sense of the worldMy last major point for Aeon Legion Labyrinth addresses its pacing There are large portions of the book dedicated to explaining the rules of the world and of its technology The information itself is fine and often explained through action though redundant If an object does something it s usually unnecessary to then explain what ad appened Alternately if an author explains what an object does the object doesn t ave to be used in that exact way a sentence later Summary if you don t mind the blunt writing style Aeon Legion Labyrinth is a fairly entertaining read I wish Beaubien Clue by Clue had done with the premise but maybee ll expand on Enticed By You (by You, his writing in the rest of the series Warning This review contains spoilersRight off the bat I just want to say I really enjoyed reading this bookI liked the main character ander transformationcharacter development throughout the book was well executed I was very impressed and Ngôi nhà xưa honestly uite enthralled by the world building The author managed to portray time travel as a real practical science and eternal youth as a plausible and attainable possibility The rules of both are pretty clear cut but don t seem trivial or arbitrary The entire city and Legion are meticulously planned with an attention to detail that reminds me of George R R Martin but thankfully this book didn t introduce as many characters ase doesThe pacing for most of the novel was also good though to be Firing Schedules for Glass - The Kiln Companion honest I got bored during the interval between the battle at the library in the beginning and Alya coming to recruit Terra ater uarry I know this part is meant to show what Terra s life is like in Adam and the Ants herome continuum and just Les Carnets de Cerise T3 - Le Dernier des cinq trsors how average and mundaneer life is but it bored me nontheless The story really picked up for me when the Tirones training started The tasks they were meant to perform were well described and exciting and I found the idea of being able to replicate any kind of terrain weather buildings and even people using salients a very captivating concept The Academy teachers were cool too esp Nikias and sometimes it was like they were just messing with the recruits for fun I found the part where Nikias and co try to ambush Terra in the Academy after Return to Doomstar (Doomstar 2) her meeting with Lycus uite funnyNow let s come to the vill wait Are they really villains Hanns and Kairos They themsleves don t think so at all Hanns believese is doing a service for Language - A Student Handbook on Key Topics and Theories his country while Kairos thinks mindbogglingly that entire worlds need to be ended along with thousands if not millions of lives to save Time itself Both seem to be doing things not for personal gain but what they truly perceive to be the greater good This is another theme that is interwoven through the whole story Who areeroes and villains really Are they just born that way or do they become like that over time How do you know you ve become a villain or Blind Sided hero The story doesn t really give us a clear answer but encourages us to form our own opinion on the matter as Alya does with TerraComing to the writing style Iave to say that I overall enjoy Beaubien s writing though I wish IGNITING THE FIRE (The Crow Academy Book 1) he would include a bit of the thoughts and feelings of the protagonist But I do think I understand whye refrained from doing that see section on Terra Mason There were a few typos and grammatical mistakes that I noticed and found slightly annoying but what bothered me than this was the lack of contractions in the dialogue The dialogues seemed like they were from a movie script and not coming from the mouths of actual peopleTerra MasonTerra s main ualities are STUBBORN or determined depending on point of view blunt strong sense of morality and justice observent extremely in control of Moobli her emotions anonestly unrealistic tolerance for pain brave if not almost fearless if the Trial of Fear is anything to judge byTerra is the story s protagonist who nearly every character in the story underestimes And for good reason She is not exceptionally smart good looking strong or talented She The Secret Art of Great Conversation has an overall average skill set but we are told from the start it s because she never truly TRIES to achieve greatness until she joins the training program I think it s because all the people iner life excluding Comic Print and Theatre in Early Modern Amsterdam her parents and Mr Smith the very disposableistory teacher ignored Digital Trust her or just downright bullieder Terra is very reserved but not unfriendly She values friendship loyalty and Tootles The Taxi And Other Rhymes honesty the most which is why she dislikes Roland so much The confusing bit abouter is that I can t really point out any major flaws about On My Knees (Stark International Trilogy, her other than 1er obstinacy which usually isn t a problem because she isn t unreasonable and unnecessarily disobedient like Hikari and 2 er astonishing lack of emotion in some scenes Case in point Zaid s death Sure is death weighs The Three Elizabeths heavily oner when she s still in the Labyrinth but after the storm The Hate U Give has passed she doesn t really mourn It s like she s taken all of the grief she felt about Zaid s death and locked it in a vault iner mind This girl is a Severus Snape level Occlumens A master at suppressing Building Vocabulary Skills her emotions Why is that I think because whenever she showed strong emotions duringer childhood throwing a rock at Val and crying in front of Sheet Metal Shop Practice her mother afterwards the result was always negative The other kids began to fearer and avoid Cait and the Devil her even ander mother yelled at er My favourite scene of Terra s arguably my favorite scene in the whole book was when she faced the Captain during the Trial of Worth What she said was really inspiring and something I think everyone should remember Greatness can come from anywhere and if you really want something and are willing to put in the work you can achieve it However the real obstacle comes when no one believes in you It makes you doubt your worth makes you second guess whether or not you are really good enough to achieve the greatness that you seek In times such as these YOU must believe in yourself and persevere It s a very good message especially for young
Adults There Is Also There is also notable lack of love interests for Terra which isn t all that surprising given er character traits but still uite anomalous considering the main character is a teenage girl in a sci fi thrillerHanns Speer A brilliant German scientist from the time of Nazi Germany who fervently believes Biggles In The Antarctic his country is destined for greatness and is willing to do anything toelp achieve that objective Or is An Unofficial Encyclopedia of Strategy for Fortniters he Hanns is the character immediately introduced after Terra and is also one of the two characters mentioned in the blurb Keeping this in minde gets a disproportionately less amount of coverage in the book In between stretches of terrible trials that Terra must tolerate we see a glimpse of what Hanns is up to Though it was insightful by that point I almost forgot The Ausar Auset Nutrition Handbook he even existed A little background info for Hanns would ve been nice and a look at justow Girls Und Panzer, vol. 1 he was managingis time travel project would ave also been appreciated Just throwing in a Hanns POV chapter from out of nowhere really felt weird when I was reading itHanns is a very well rounded character He s cunning charming patriotic but also smug and fooled by is own La Vilaine Lulu hubris He wants to be aero to Becoming Daddys Cow: A Twisted Taboo Dubcon Lactation Body Transformation DD/lg Erotica his country and though is willing to lie and steal to get whate wants is unwilling to maim and murder innocent people That doesn t show Filthy Rich Boys (Rich Boys of Burberry Prep, him in a very good light but considering most of the establishederoes in the story Granvilles New Strategy of Daily Stock Market Timing for Maximum Profit have killed tens of thousands of people already it s just an interesting contrast I findim to be a compelling antagonist and I Artificial Evolution (Big Sigma, hope to see ofim in the next bookAlya SilverwindBeautiful powerful rebelious and kind Alya is portrayed as the ideal superhero in the beginning However she is also one of the deadliest members of the Legion with the On Moral Courage highest confirmed kills and the lesser known title of Bloodstorm Sheas Nanny by Chance her moments of seriousness and wisdom but is usually shown to be playful and cheerful I likeder character but never really developed an attachment to Mastering the Art of Self-Sufficiency in New Zealand herLycus CerberusThis guy was just amazing He was the one character that always made me sit up straight and pay attention to what wasappening Lycus is the brutal and slightly deranged ead of the training programme Though e appears absolutely monstrous in the eyes of the tirones John, Paul Me-Before the Beatles he is respected by allis fellow legionnaires I found is three faces the Captain the beast and the scholar very compelling and the connections between is three personas Ion Adventure in the Heartland, Volume 1 his alias Cerberus the three time cores onis aeon edge and Psychotherapy of Personality Disorders his role as guardian of the gates was also appreciated Somehow the mix of violence and caring inis personality justworked I didn t expect to get as much attached to Hedge Fund - 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D charming a genius inventor of a time travel machine and a dedicated member of the Nazi Party Yet Authority Affiliate Marketing he cannot understand why people from the future regardim and Using Twitter For Business (Stuff Made Simple Book 4) his fellow Nazis as monsters Nowe must use Anatomy of the Orchestra his charisma and cunning to challenge the seemingly invincible Aeon Legion and its monopoly on time travel He will not uit Hanns will stealistory itself if How to make Money with Porn heas to mistakenly believing it will prove im to be a er. The author as given such great writing advice on youtube that I ll Get Up and Do It! have to seeow it translates to Repeat Performance his actual work This book is entertaining enough andas some interesting ideas The author Newsjacking has a great sense ofumor and a good grasp on The Baron Goes Fast (Baron, how to play around with tropes to mess with your expectations The writing is a little on the amateurish side which is perfectly understandable and forgivable for an author s first published work I believe it was self published but I could be wrong It does seem to be a lot better edited than the average self published book All in all I really enjoyed it Is it the best book I ve ever read Nope Is it the worst Nope Was it fun entertaining and memorable Yeah I think that it was Also to any perspective writers out there Iighly recommend that you check out this author s youtube series Terrible Writing Advice where The Organic City he gives some very valuable writing advice in a prettyumorous manner This book was forced all of it Over the top clumsy obvious Examples The whole Merriam-Websters Collegiate Dictionary heroism as a concept theme Don t get me wrong it is a great debate but the book itself was in the end too black and white to be the appropriate ground to pose it The book wants to be so philosophical but in the end there are clear good and bad guys at least that is what it is intended Terra wants to be aero and the Academy trains Affiliate Marketing Business heros and it bothers me to no end I know it is part of the discussion but it seems thateroism is a job you can train for by following some steps rather than a collection of traits and decisions as envisioned from a particular perspective whichever those might be The thematically appropriate names and the allegedly timeless Saturn City which is actually Giving the Body Its Due heavily based on ancient Greece and Rome Like come on Terra Mason is a girl that likes stones and is strong and resilient as one Lycus Cerberusas a grin like a wolf I wonder if their parents could see their future and named them accordingly Nikias Orion Prometheus all characters from Greek mythohistory Endymion s symbol is a moon ARRRGH breathe Not to mention all the positions in the army consul cohort leggionaire centurion are ripped right from Rome The fights were like a fcking videogame In fact all the book was Am I the only one who noticed Everything Hilla Rebay happens in stages the enemies and weaponsave a number of abilities and very specific limits and there is always a precise way to escape the situation The fact that most of the book focused on the training with little time left to forge relationships and delve in the subplots did not Living Doll help I didn t believe Terra s feelings positive or negative for other people and the subplots seemed to come out of nowhere with very little previous work Terra leaving and returningome It was very weird First she tells them I m joining the time police and apparently they take it as normal and when she returns they act as if she Designing for Magazines had gone away for a couple of days to a regular training course The way Delphia is treated is similar She appears early to provide an introduction to the city and then briefly returns in the end to sayi One would think Terra would make the effort of keeping in touch with The Wild Side her since she was so nice toer Oh and False Start her backstory also came out of nowhere and wanted to explain something that really didn t need all that much of an explanationOverall despite all of the above I liked the worldbuilding a lot It shows that it is very well thougt out and I found it uite original I loved the character of Lycus What can I say Iave a sweet spot for those Roland and Delphia also made my day I could even empathise with Hanns and Tombland his fight withis superior s blind faith in false science Us science people understand each other Terra s character development although His Plaything heavyanded was very well done I disliked Cuckolded! Taken By My Husbands Bully her at the beginning for being so spoiled and whining but I ended up liking what she represented So will I read the following installment It is very likelyThanks for reading Plot 45Charcterisation 25 Great characters but JP doesn t show their character enough so that when there are supposed to be emotional moments or punches they don tit Competitive Strategy: Techniques for Analyzing Industries and Competitors hard enoughWorldbuilding 455 Incredible original world with many cool new ish conceptsThe Mason on the end ofer name annoyed meYet I think the author Captain Tsubasa - Tome 29: La renaissance du duo en or ! has potential and might improve so I plan to read Best new series Iave read in a while Thanks for the new read JP and keep it up I found this book not long after stumbling across the author s YouTube Channel To put my opinion of the book in one sentence it s One of my favorites I Dream Fossil have read many of the other reviewsere on goodreads so I am going to try and focus on things that I didn t see from the other review that I want to talk aboutThe most odd thing I found about this book is what audience it is going for For background I am
a sopho in college at the moment What I find most strange is that the book cannot sopho in college at the moment What I find most strange is that the book cannot to pinpoint a target age group In many ways I can see this novel being for a young adult audience maybe 8th grade to 11th or so Many of the main themes it deals with seem to be around that area ideas on growing up becoming independent overcoming struggle finding inner motivation etc All of these are good themes and I think they are definitely done well The main character being nothing than
A Normal Modern Girl Who Just Graduated normal modern girl who just graduated school After We Collided (After, highlights this In truther character is so bland and 0 dimensional in the beginning that it is very easy for anyone to put themselves in Web Marketing For Dummies her shoes However it does not take all that long for some odd topics to come up The first that struck me is when the main character Terra is being introduced to the grand Saturn City and all of its wonders She meets a friend and shortly after that friend s mother The mother introduces Terra to a series of drugs that the denizens of Saturn City use One of these makes sex amazing This comes to me out of nowhere and seemed jarring for the relatively normal tone of the book For me to include the topic of aphrodisiacs is pretty advanced something that I could see a book targeted for people around 18 After reading this I mentally adjusted Ok I thought the diction and overall language may be a bit low but the topics are going to be advanced And yet they never do I know there is a running joke about love triangles for the author andis fanbase but that does not limit the author from making any romantic references I say this because I feel that if The Undesirables he is going to include lore on the sexual activities of the denizens of Saturn City it makes sense that at least some aspect of the story might include something similar Instead this aphrodisiac is rather just dropping into the story It is a bit of a shock but nothing The second and perhaps most strange thing for me is the inclusion of the word bully many many times Perhaps for Terra aged at around 18 it makes some sense forer to say this However when the mean gruff and near psychopathic Lycus to say something along the lines of I ave no room for BULLIES in MY school it really made me cringe A person who is aged I believe over a thousand years saying bully just doesn t make sense For me that word is only used around middle school younger and maybe the early alf of igh school not a person with a thousand years under is beltThese two things together in the same book is what I am confused about On one and the advanced topic of aphrodisiacs are discussed but any other reference to love or sex is never again mentioned Then not long after there is several instances of the word bully as if the book is a PSA in middle school My most pressing advice for the author would be to define is target audience and write to that end I ave no issue with advanced topics being covered in books for middle and igh schoolers I read book series like Gregor the Overlander which ad no issue covering many dark and twisted things Yet in Gregor the Overlander these topics did not seem dropped in The fear of death and suffering are common and pressing concerns in the series with many threats around every dark corner However in Aeon Legion that is mostly a dry motivational tale of becoming something from nothing a single comment on sex is just strange Another thing I wish to talk about is the main character Terra I will try not to spoil too much focusing mostly on the beginning of the book most of which is available as a sample Primarily as mentioned before Terra seems even flatter than 1 dimensional to start with This is so bad that you could switch er gender with nearly zero impact on the book an aspect that does not change later on Honestly the most severe impact of Terra being female is that she is not as strong or tall as other characters something that does not ave to be specific to a female character This is furthered in er lack of interest of any character The normal interactions between boy and girl just do not appear with Terra She does not ave any interest in any person and neither does any person seem to ave interest in er Although it is fine to not deal with romance ints at it even so small as a tiny comment like e looks cute would be cliche but it would at least flesh out er gender a bit Am I saying all female characters need to ave relationships or act overtly feminine No However a strong aspect of Terra s character is that she is a relatively normal girlAnother aspect of Terra that seems to be lacking is er overall personality I would say that in general Terra seems to react to most things in a predictable and almost boring way Something time based Weird and unimaginable This is made worse by er strangely ignorant comments When she sees a character she immediately assumes that they must be like ow she imagines Knight Must be chivalrous Japanese Must be onorable Muslim Oh my gosh You are going to make be cover my air To me it was much to obvious that er acting in such ways was an easy way to develop the theme that you can t judge a person based on their appearance or nationality etc The theme itself I find to be a tad simple And with most characters there is only one single twist to them Small spoilers The knight is crafty and the opposite of chivalrous The Japanese woman does not care about onor The Muslim does not care about Terra S Hair Showing And s air showing and very tolerant of others However there is not really all that much to them I think this theme should ave been broadened to the cliche don t judge a book by its cover At least with that a interesting character could ave been crafted instead of just a negative of a racial archetypeThe third thing I want to talk about is the second most important character in the book the antagonist Put simply I am mostly disappointing in im The author calls im a Nazi owever that is a dubious claim Many times in the book Hannes rejects key aspects of the Nazi ideology such as the ate of Jews racial supremacy and many others Essentially Hannes is a German nationalist He wants Germany to win the Second World War not Nazi Germany What I dislike about this is that it waters down the character In the first paragraph you are it with an astounding event Nazis invade a library in the 21st century However this is really just in name only In a move that I can understand and respect the author does not go about including actual Nazism in the book or at the very least makes sure any Nazi ideology is understood to be false and bad The author tries ard to make us sympathize with Hannes to make us understand is motivation However I believe that the author tries too ard to make Hannes not so bad Is e a Nazi Yes but e doesn t believe in any of that nasty stuff like eugenics Is e at odds against Terra Yes but e is very polite and a gentleman Is e involved with one of the worst regimes in istory Yes but e isn t evil e is just misguided One of the things I ate the most about Hannes is that e is made out to be one of the most bright scientists ever capable of pulling amazing feats of ingenuity and a REAL scientist However when e is faced with the concept that the Nazis are seen as evil or that they lose the second world war e just can t accept or understand it He merely rejects any notion of it Not to be a gatekeeper but I feel that an actual scientist would be curious at this and investigate it not just brush it off When a scientist finds something that goes against what e knows e seeks it out and explores it not reject itAnother point about Hannes is that I feel that e is underused The synopsis makes Hannes out to be the main villain the main antagonist in the book However I feel that e isn t Terra faces many challenges and all of them are much arder than Hannes Hannes is not the main villain e is just a side show that serves in moving the plot along near the end of the book I feel that there is a lot than could ave been done with imTo end this bit of ranting I got into I just want to say again ow amazing the book is What I talked about were I think minor flaws the bits of dust in an almost perfect gem It is clear from the onset that the author put an epic amount of thought and care into this book and the entire setting From the moment I read it I did nothing but read until I was finished I would most definitely recommend this book to anyone just keep in mind that it is angled towards young adults I found out about this author and book through is YouTube channel of bad writing advice which unlike the name suggests is good writing advice Lots of sarcasm and wit making fun of standard tropes in many different genres though typically YA What attracted me most about this book was the synposis and the twist of the third paragaph Typically you ll see the monoamorous couples described with each aving their own paragraph but no e s a Nazi e s er enemy and that s ilarious Although the synopsis is a bit misleading as at no point does Hanns ever try proving Nazis were eroes nor was e all that confused about people referring to im as a monster He just a normal Nazi who thought what e was doing. Time travel as made the Edge of Time a dangerous place To protect the Edge of Time from the disastrous alterations of time travelers the Aeon Legion seeks the greatest soldiers and warriors from the most bloody war torn eras in istory Those they deem worthy gain a chance to compete in the toughest training program ever designedTerra Mason a plain eighteen year old girl from the modern United States as an impressive stu.
Free read Aeon LegionWas just and that Germany should winPerhaps I inadvertantly led myself to ave igher than usual expectations but the book is rathernot good It just feels a bit awkward since I feel the uality of is videos is so igh it s a bit of a surprise to see this book written as it isIt starts off in a library with our eroine Terra coming face to face with the Nazi antagonist of the book Hanns The awkward wording kind of threw me off It gets going immediately which was a little jarring but otherwise would ve been okay if it wasn t so telly instead of showyI thought perhaps only this first initial scene would ve been like that which would ve been rather interesting to see play out We get told the action and find out the characters perspectives on it later But no this trend persists the entirety of the book It s 100% telling and not showing That s one of the biggest and most well known trope of bad writing of all I m just shocked that the author ad this problemIt s frustrating in general to read a book that tells you everything without showing but it feels all the frustrating coming from someone who gives out writing advice and good advice at thatSo much appens to our main character but we never get any sort of real reaction from er There is a sentence or a couple words ere and there but nothing that feels impactful emotional genuine or lastingShe s approached by Silverwind a protector of time with a job offer of monumental proportions guarding time itself And ow does she react Barely at all Perhaps a little shocked confused but other than that I ave no idea I m not even told thatShe ends up accepting the offer of course and I was curious to see ow the author would andle the parents ButI am a bit confused Terra literally tells er parents what she s doing and we never see their reaction They were apparently okay with it and she sends them an update after she leaves on er ventures then later comes ome at the end like it s no big deal and er parents are just chill with it I know it s a little detail and YAs are NOTORIOUS for dropping the parents but this was such adrop Just a weird way to go about itThe main character in general is mind boggling ignorant and plain stupid She s always shocked of every new piece of information she ears regardless if it should come at a surprise any It s like she doesn t ave the ability to remember things or logically deduce thingsTerra Blinked A thousand years You re that oldVita sighed Why do they always find that surprisingTerra knew the Saturnians were older than they appeared but she ad no idea they were that oldYou were literally told that those people were immortal and you re just as shocked every time you ear someone s ageTerra just looked confusedTerra raised an eyebrow I m confusedLiterally one sentence in between separates thatMost of the descriptions in this book stem from the environment or the appearances of people As an example the character Lycus We re introduced with im mostly being in shadow glaring eyes and when e smiles that wolf like grin as we re reminded every time e smiles which is often it creeps Terra out But why Just what was it that made im so immediately scary to er We re told she s afraid of im and that she tries er best to avoid im but we re never told why What is er thought process behind er fear What aspects of im what sort of presence does e give off that s so frightening We re constantly told e s scary and intimidating without actually seeing im do anything scary or intimdating view spoilerAt least not until a bit later but that doesn t excuse the nagging reminders of it earlier with nothing to back them up or explain them I did enjoy the concept of is three faces though each with their own name and personality but it bothered me to ave so many characters mis naming im while e was in is Lycus face form whateveryoucallit ide spoiler Aeon Legion Labyrinth is an enjoyable read I found it to ave very compelling world building with great depth and istory It is a fantastic mixture of Harry Potter and Divergent from ow it feltmoved not from the setting The characters were interesting and the premise of the book drew me in The style prose can be clunky at times but I got used to it by the end Be forewarned that there are some spelling and punctuation issues but if that kind of thing doesn t bother you too much it isn t a big deal A few of the characters come off feeling one dimensional Terra s the main character parents are the worst in that regard Their reactions and personality are flat and they feel like throw aways to me With that being said I found the rest of the book to be great The cast develops well and are believable The plot takes a bit to get moving but once it does it its ard I found the book to be an innovative take on difficult tropes time travel and coming of age This book was written by the Terrible Writing Advice guy on Youtube After
#READING THIS BOOK I CAN SAY #this book I can say e followed is own advice up to the part where the plot is neededI ll give you a brief blurb Terra attacks time travelling Nazis and becomes a famous time knight s suire Then uh Terra goes to school and there are Nazis What are the stakes Terra doesn t become a soldier and a Nazi might discover is country s orrid crimes which onestly sounds awesome by the way ALTHOUGH I did enjoy the school The pacing was brisk and the shit appening was interesting and they ad the best fucking teacher and I love imSo what are we left with The world and the characters And to be onest those were well done Sure the description of Saturn city was lacking and I understood nothing of its geography but the technology istory and wars the Legion s numerous enemies did build a pretty complete image BUT where this book really shines is with its characters I can onest to God say that you ave never seen and won t be seeing these characters again Soon anyway It doesn t mean that they re great or three dimensional characters by any means but they are uniue enough for it to be notedMC Terra Mason is a bored girl who wants a goal worthy of er attention She s enduring blunt and down to earth but not enough to think that eroes can t exist and that doing the right thing doesn t matter She ll elp people in need but leave them if they can andle themselvesRoland is the love interest I think when you ave it that you can t tell if a love interest is in the room it deserves a comment like this is god level writing He s a knight who lies and cheats but e as real skills and talent Hikari is a martial artist who wants a sword and by god she s going to get it even if it means fighting the whole schoolThere are but you get the idea These guys all ave their own little uirks attitude and way of speaking that makes them all stand out and I love it Like Terra clicked with me than any other eroine since Angelfall in an actual oh this is totally me way not oh this is a blank sheet way Seriously my personality is like 75% Terra except that I m actually smart and funny and single guys it me upYeaaaahh this is Maberan s reviews of course there s negatives duh Just like this book as pretty uniue positives it as pretty uniue negativesOK so Terra kept saying what the reader should ve understanding from er actions and words I don t know if that as a name but an example is Terra always getting back up No matter ow many times people berate er or kick er she s always getting back on er feet That s actually something I love in MCs and I was glad to finally see a female protagonist like thatBut then there s literally a scene where a character is like I guess being good at this is your talent uh and Terra deadass turns to the camera and says no my only talent is never knowing when to give up Like we can t tell LIKE DUDE You re the TWA guy You should know you don t just SAY what you want the readers to think about a character You let the character be themselves and ave the readers understand them through their actions and words as you did with Terra until this fucking scene There s also the same thing with Terra being like a rock which is actually shown from the start and then suddenly you get this orrible chapter in the middle of the story about er backstory and it Gave Me Vietnam flashbacks I DID NOT NEED TO SEE THATEdit I saw a review where the reader said it was very weird ow emotionless Terra was and that e enjoyed this chapter for the backstory and it s weird because that s literally what appened in my childhood Terra suppressed er emotions just like I did because people were picking on er for being different and the adults did nothing Reading that chapter was just painful because I saw all my old caretakers and it made me see red This kind of thing really puts characters and writing into perspective doesn t itAlso there were these subversion of expectations that I could see ten miles from ere and it s really weird because it s like these random little moments during training Like Terra fails a test or something maybe gets called out by a teacher or Roland comes by to berate er then comes is turn and Terra s like oh finally Roland will be getting some and then gasp e succeedsLike I m very confused as to ow obvious these all managed to be Because this isn t ard But they all failed And I am left bemusedAnd then there s the whole Nazi thing So Terra mets this Hanns guy from 1940 and e s all we are ze best and she s like dude nazis are the worst thing ever and they meet uite a few times and I thought it was this really cool red thread with ow enemies perceive each other and the difference between A HERO AND A VILLAIN AND hero and a villain and you can tell which one you re which Like Terra grows each time she meets Hanns and that relationship she as with im fits with the goal that pushed to join the legion and the doubts the Captain raised in er about the Aeon Legion being no better than any other armyBut then it just putters out Like instead of showing im the things the Nazis ave done will do or give im dates and try to understand is point of view she s just dude itler is evil you are disgusting ow can you not see that and e obviously shrugs er accusations off as propagandaLike I could do a better job than that She just insults im and expects that to change is mindflashback to a video by JdGtalking about a live action show of the ninja turtles with a 5th turtle with the power to turn people good with one call outJdG Bc I mean you don t need the turtles You save the world with that power5th turtle figurine You re evil It s not good to be evilHitlerKen doll Oh my Shneider I see it now diesend flashbackLol But erm let s get back to the book So yeah at first I though that Terra would make a parallel between er and Hanns and the Captain and the Aeon Legion but nope She just keeps on being thick eaded and refuses to see Hanns side to try and connect with im and open im up to er own side of things Like you do know that a big part of the German population didn t know about the atrocities they committed right Would you ate them too Hanns is no better than that and you could make im see what s about to appen and at least try to make im stop trying to time travel but nopeIs it because e s a Nazi I don t think so because the author does portray im in a better light than the SS or other members of the party I think it s because that s going to appen in the seuel is there one lol I don t know I just want logicAnd I mean Terra is also pretty uh what s the word like a dude says e s Muslim and she s immediately like I m not wearing a burua bro and e s like wat and she s like omg you re Muslim and you actually respect women LIKE DUDE WOW I thought I was little bit too ateful of the good old Allahu Akbar but that s just made me feel a lot better about myself geez And there s all this bullshit with Roland just like waiting and observing people fail a test so e can learn from their mistakes and somehow that makes im the worst person ever Oh and there s also a part where she s told that er friends went ahead of er because if they adn t they would ve been dead and she also sees that as a major betrayal like dude they were firing rockets at them geezAnd there s also this test they go through where they view spoilerget captured and tortured by their own people and it s treated as this big ow could you but THERE S LITERALLY NO DESCRIPTION OF IT It s just they tortured them and Terra being mad Like I adn t even registered until I read another review that this would ve totally affected them but it ad so little impact on anything that I just didn t get it ide spoiler I put this book down at around 53%What I LikedFirst I ave to give regards to Beaubien s YouTube account Terrible Writing Advice which I greatly enjoy He clearly understands the pitfalls of various ubiuitous fiction tropes especially those in YA novels and it shows I didn t roll my eyes at a love triangle nor was I thrown out of the world by any obvious plotholesThe novel s greatest strength is in its premise Beaubien successfully made a world where knights Nazis martial artists and other istorical eroes and villains could interact with each other which I found fascinating Imagine say if Roman gladiators ad made a futuristic Colisseum on a level of Saturn City or a debate scene with Greek scholars pitted against Tibetan monks I also liked the idea of is protagonist and to a lesser extent is other charactersWhat I Didn t Likebut beyond their initial impressions they didn t ave much depth This could ve been solved through my main problem endemic to the entire book Beaubien s writing styleThe writing is very blunt and relatively unemotional Most sentences just state something that appened X stared at Y Y shook is ead He ad a ard time believing it Y activated the machine It then sputtered and turned on That sort of writing A visceral writing style would both increase readers interest through sentence variety and descriptive language and add depth to the cha. Bborn streak Her persistence and bravery gains the notice and sponsorship of one of the Aeon Legion's greatest eroines Now Terra must turn that stubbornness into determination if she is to contend with istory's finest soldiers and somehow pass the Aeon Legion's final test the mysterious Labyrinth She will not uit Terra will prove that even someone as average as er can still be a eroineHanns Speer is polite good nature.